FIELDFARE
See how he celebrates
the apple,
perches alongside of it,
honours it with a black, bulging eye,
stabs its sweetness,
savours the juice,
then stabs,
stabs some more,
piercing the yellow skin,
feasting on the melting flesh,
secretions coating his beak,
smothering him in homage
to the apple,
to life.
8 comments:
A delightful poem, Mistlethrush, and - as ever - such precise observation. I learn such a lot from your poems!
Yes, as Coastcard says - so focused. Fantastic that you're already editing your November poem-a-day responses too.
I like the idea of mistlethrush celebrating the fieldfare celebrating the apple.
Lovely details too, well observed
Brilliant. Love it, Carol.
'alongside' or 'alongside of'?
that is the question.
Apparently either, so I'm wrong!
Apologies.
DM
C & SR - Thanks. The submission has to in by the beginning of Jan so that's motivation enough to get the editing under way!
CGP & Weaver - Thanks
DM - You're right.There shouldn't be an 'of' after 'alongside' but the rhythm doesn't scan as well without it. Thanks for mentioning it - I'm having a re-think.
Congratulations on your Crafty Green Poet win! I love Ruth Padel's book.
Thanks Coastcard. I'm looking forward to reading it and am hoping it will be a useful teaching resource.
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