Thursday, 18 December 2008

Fieldfare

I'm in the middle of editing this. It's from the November poem a day challenge. The prompt was 'celebration' so I thought I'd show wildlife celebrating

FIELDFARE
See how he celebrates
the apple
,
perches alongside of it,
honours it with a black, bulging eye,
stabs its sweetness,
savours the juice,
then stabs,
stabs some more,
piercing the yellow skin,
feasting on the melting flesh,
secretions coating his beak,
smothering him in homage
to the apple,
to life.

8 comments:

Coastcard said...

A delightful poem, Mistlethrush, and - as ever - such precise observation. I learn such a lot from your poems!

Susan Richardson said...

Yes, as Coastcard says - so focused. Fantastic that you're already editing your November poem-a-day responses too.

Crafty Green Poet said...

I like the idea of mistlethrush celebrating the fieldfare celebrating the apple.

Lovely details too, well observed

The Weaver of Grass said...

Brilliant. Love it, Carol.

Anonymous said...

'alongside' or 'alongside of'?
that is the question.
Apparently either, so I'm wrong!
Apologies.

DM

Mistlethrush said...

C & SR - Thanks. The submission has to in by the beginning of Jan so that's motivation enough to get the editing under way!

CGP & Weaver - Thanks

DM - You're right.There shouldn't be an 'of' after 'alongside' but the rhythm doesn't scan as well without it. Thanks for mentioning it - I'm having a re-think.

Coastcard said...

Congratulations on your Crafty Green Poet win! I love Ruth Padel's book.

Mistlethrush said...

Thanks Coastcard. I'm looking forward to reading it and am hoping it will be a useful teaching resource.

from the field book

from the field book
An inspiring gift for anyone who enjoys watching nature.